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swear that you should hear it ([personal profile] sardonicynic) wrote in [personal profile] knitwitfics 2009-05-31 02:34 pm (UTC)

Augh, Karen.

I read this last night but was too brain-dead to comment before I dropped into a tiny coma.

So now? Halfway coherent feedback, you can has! *G*

I just -- GAH, I can hear Barry and oh, man, Kim's rationalizations broke me:

It wasn't like he hit her, called her names. Maybe she was overreacting. He was older than her, knew more than she did. What did she know about how to have a healthy relationship?

But I love that she realizes she has to get out, and of course the "gilded cage" metaphor works so perfectly.

(Only one beyond-tiny ding: maybe tack on "card" after "social security" in the first line of the last paragraph?)

And of course this Jack/Teri detail put a lump in my throat:

They'd had their problems, but she knew that they had never seen each other as anything but equals.

Augh. Just, augh. I need more of your fic in my life, like, yesterday.

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